With better producing, this could be a nice song. Calm intro, builds slowly - I like that. But the kick drum and the bassline are way too quiet compared to rest of the material. At around 0:45 the saw wave pad sounds too loud. The lead which starts playing at 1:09 could work better if it was louder or more aggressive - the melody sounds ok! Pluck-like lead at 1:40 is too loud. Speech samples are nice but the melodies near the end don't really get me going.. I suggest to mix more carefully. Make sure the levels are balanced.